Poem Comments

you took my breath away

i know my words wont mean much and will bring so much boredom but these feelings have to come off my chest and in to thought.

i kept looking for forward but u and i both knew that my eyes were set on u


for the first time u i felt this kind of emotion it was as if u were there holding me and making me blush

when we talk in person, on the phone, even text i feel the connection between getting stronger

when we kissed for the first time i felt safe and confident that u were the one.

we were so young and in love the world was our sand box and nothing could stop us

drama....took the best of u and now your afraid of him hurting me when u know i can take care of myself

days pass, then weeks, and no word from u and your so called love for me

we finally speak and then we kiss and i feal so complete again

the next day u say u can't be with me cause your friends don't like me and u want them more than me

years pass and my heart has been passed around over and over again with the same excuse, they cheated, they pitied me, could care less, didn't want what i wanted, oh yeah they thought i was ugly to so that helped with this rhyme of the unworthy (if u didn't notice that was a rhyme)

in my hand i hold a photo, one that shows what we could of been, should of been

with these final words i say goodbye to no one and everyone at the same time cause she who took my breath away......

took my life as well...................................................bang

you took my life away
lillesadist This wasn't too bad, but I got tired of reading "you took my breath away"
15yrs